Wednesday, January 20, 2016

A Coney Island Life - Rough Draft

As we all know it, life is short. We as people feel the need to life out our life to the fullest, which is true, but we shouldn't waste it either. "A Coney Island Life" by James L. Weil tells one to not waste their time on hopeless dreams before times up because once the time comes one shouldn't have regrets. 

In this world no one should have regrets. In the poem, James L. Weil seems to be comparing his life to Coney Island which was a carnival in New York City. He comes off by first comparing his life to a roller coaster,"On rollercoaster ups and downs" which is true. In life there is going to be good times and not so good times, but we should hold on tight to what matters most, so they don't slip out of our grasps because if we don't we might regret the things we could have done. 

As the poem goes on, he then writes,"And seen my helium hopes break skyward without me," here he talks about how his hopes and dreams, how they were always up in the air and not for for, and no longer can be accomplished. That is because all this time he focused on the wrong things, now he has regrets. It seems as if something is pulling down, preventing him from grabbing onto his dreams again, that something that he cannot prevent is slowly dragging him away.

Towards the end,  he states,"I take perhaps my last ride," and from there it seems as if he is slowly exiting this world. He then says,"How many more times round I have to catch that brass-ring-sun, before the game is up." As the poem comes to an end, the last statement truly points out that as the roller coaster goes round and round, he starts to realize that he doesn't have much time left, that death is slowly creeping on him. 

Life is something you only get to experience once. Don't waste it on dreams far out of your reach. Instead, make smart decisions, but also have some fun, and in the end, try not to have regrets. 



5 comments:

  1. Good job on your essay. I loved some of the things you wrote. They were deep and effective. You only had certain mistakes like in the first paragraph you put life instead of live. Also, you should add commas in some sentences so it does not seem so long. Other than that you did a good job with telling the reader about the poem. Good job.

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  2. Great job on your essay. Your quotes was good and has good explanation and tell me about this poem. Your thesis is really good and how it relied on the poem. Your sentence are really fluent and easy to understand. Your sentence are long so put commas. But good job

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  3. YOUR DISCUSSION AND PARAGRAPHS ARE INCOMPLETE. WHENEVER YOU STATE AN IDEA YOU NEED TO EXPLAIN IT COMPLETELY. YOUR INTRODUCTION IS VERY WEAK BECAUSE YOU HAVE BOLD STATEMENTS THAT ARE RANDOM AND ARE NOT COMPLETE IN ITS DISCUSSION. YOUR BODY PARAGRAPHS NEEDED TO BE CHUNKY PARAGRAPHS WITH AT LEAST TWO PIECES OF EVIDENCE. YOUR CONCLUSION IS HIGHLY INCOMPLETE IN DISCUSSION AND LASTING INSIGHT. IN YOUR CONCLUSION YOU ARE TO SUMMARIZE ENTIRE ESSAY AND IDEAS, RESTATE THESIS, AND THEN HAVE YOU LASTING DISCUSSION (INSIGHT). AS(2-)

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  4. YOUR DISCUSSION AND PARAGRAPHS ARE INCOMPLETE. WHENEVER YOU STATE AN IDEA YOU NEED TO EXPLAIN IT COMPLETELY. YOUR INTRODUCTION IS VERY WEAK BECAUSE YOU HAVE BOLD STATEMENTS THAT ARE RANDOM AND ARE NOT COMPLETE IN ITS DISCUSSION. YOUR BODY PARAGRAPHS NEEDED TO BE CHUNKY PARAGRAPHS WITH AT LEAST TWO PIECES OF EVIDENCE. YOUR CONCLUSION IS HIGHLY INCOMPLETE IN DISCUSSION AND LASTING INSIGHT. IN YOUR CONCLUSION YOU ARE TO SUMMARIZE ENTIRE ESSAY AND IDEAS, RESTATE THESIS, AND THEN HAVE YOU LASTING DISCUSSION (INSIGHT). AS(2-)

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